Wednesday, 10 April 2013

Evaluation Q1 Plan Nicole Rawson




Points for evaluation
CINEMATOGRAPHY – Camera work and framing
EDITING – Cuts, filters, post-production effects & transitions
MISE-EN-SCENE – What’s in the shot; props, lighting, costumes, makeup etc.
SOUND – Diegetic VS non-diegetic
1.      Intro is good – looks professional. Gets the film off to a good start.
2.      Titles are good in that they are like the pages of a book – fairy-tale book. The colouring and font was inspired by the work of Quentin Tarantino as he is known for manipulating classic stories, similarly to our film.
3.      Non-diegetic voiceover is clear and well balanced.
4.      Opening scene good establishing shot introducing main character however it should be a pull focus and action is blurred.
5.      Jump cuts remove unnecessary passage of time.
6.      Focus on toothbrush is still not right. Considering I wasn’t present for the filming of this scene, I would’ve ensured the camera was in focus before recording the shot.
7.      Cut from mirror to mirror is a graphic match, and she is holding a hairbrush, as she was holding a toothbrush in the previous shot. However, I would’ve preferred to use a crossfade or a wipe to make the scenes blend more smoothly.
8.      Diegetic sound of door squeaking is too loud in comparison to the voiceover.
9.      Music finishes as the voiceover ends, the door closes, and the screen goes black. Good synchronisation.
10.   Introduction of Ella’s friend comes with a warmer tone to the scene, to show she is a friendly character.
11.   Match on action when Nicole sits down gives the scene good continuity and makes the action ‘flow’. Scene sticks to 180 degree rule throughout.
12.   Bench scene is an intertextual reference to the famous Forrest Gump scene. Forrest Gump is also a lonely character in his film.

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13.   Chez bumping into Nicole shows he is a hostile character.
14.   The dramatic change in music and bright, clashing hoody show he is a contrasting character to the scenario shown so far.
15.   The stand-out green hoody, change in music and freeze-frame show he is important in some way.
16.   Hoody hides his face – shady character – mise-en-scene.
17.   Ella looking away from where Chez left the scene, shows she wants nothing to do with him.
18.   HMS Looking up shows he is the dominant character, in the opinion of Ella.
19.   HMS Eye-line match to show all Ella’s attention is focused on Seth – important character too. Still staring at him as he walks off, then goes back to looking down. Seth is her only reason to look away from her paper.
20.   Starts daydreaming and smiling when she says “life is good”, but then mentions “these b*tches” and looks back down as her smile drops.
21.   Flashback to hallway. Should fade in or wipe.
22.   Colour filter is to show a hostile, cold environment along with the fact that this shot is a memory.
23.   Dark clothing, hair, and makeup = nasty people. In contrast to Ella’s bright clothes and hair.
24.   Title of film cuts on here (1:40) as two of the main characters are in shot and the main story develops from this point on. Freeze-frame and change of music again in the same way ‘Chez’ was introduced.
25.   Looking up at characters (low-angle shot) shows dominance of the bullies.
26.   Music is synchronised with the ending of the flashback to show this significant scene is over.
27.   Cut back to warm tone and better contrast shows back to present day with friendly, warm environment.(melodrama Richard dyer)
28.   Looking up at Mum shows higher importance
29.   Accented regional pronunciation of the word “there” is not ideal if the character hopes to appeal to a wider audience.
30.   The tone of the sound changes between shots, subliminally breaking continuity.
31.   Gentle piano music starts as Ella’s Mum starts to build her confidence. Matches the warm sepia tone and emphasises the relevance of the dialogue.
32.   When the hug ensues, diegetic sound of paper should not be present
33.   Fade shows passage of time
34.   Close up of phone highlights importance of photo and characters emotions gives vibes of a stalker/obsessive character, highlights dodgy character something’s not right
35.   Red, purple & yellow filter looks unprofessional and doesn’t fit in with the rest of the film. Although the red is supposed to represent danger, this doesn’t come across well. The viewer is more distracted by the harsh contrast and un-natural colouring.
36.   Depth-of-field on the knife shot shows it is an important element in the scenes to come.
37.   Cutting back and forth between the two scenes builds tension and gives indication of forthcoming events where the two scenes will collide.
38.   Music builds as there is a knock on the door and Chez goes to his door. It is not made clear that there are two different doors involved.
39.   Banana throw seems irrelevant, although the intention was to display the angry persona of Chez.
40.   It is not clear that the knife is picked up off the worktop. This is a very important event which is overlooked. A close-up of Chez picking up the knife should’ve been added.
41.   Locking the door gives the impression that Ella is now trapped.
42.   Door latch goes from engaged to disengaged. Flaw in continuity.
43.   Canted angle reflects something isn’t right, as Ella looks puzzled / distressed.
44.   Phone conversation cuts between two characters, with overlapping sound to make the cuts less obvious. The sound is also filtered at points to make it sound as though it is from the phone call. This is hearing what the character would hear, making the audience feel more involved rather than simply observing the entire scene.
45.   Shaky camera angle looks unprofessional, but also seems as though it’s from the point-of-view of someone spying on Ella. She doesn’t know they are there.
46.   Just as Nicole mentions the antagonist, he arrives in the scene.
47.   180 degree rule is broken, however this is not especially noticeable as a cut to the front of Ella breaks up this sequence.
48.   When Ella threatens James, the sudden change in character may shock the audience. This makes them feel less sympathetic towards her and has a detrimental impact on the emotion they are supposed to feel at the end of the film.
49.   He is shot on an equal level before she pushes him, whereas after the confrontation he is looked down upon. Has lost some of his dominance.
50.   Badly framed shot when Ella pushes James away. The action of James falling back is too fast for the camera pan to keep up with. This results in a blurry, unprofessional image where the action isn’t caught on camera.



51.   When Seth sits down to talk to Ella, the camera-work is very shaky. This should’ve been eliminated by using a tri-pod with the camera, instead of taking the shot hand-held.
52.   Just after Seth reveals to Ella that he likes her, music begins to play again. From this, the audience may recall the same style of music being used every time Chez is present. This means they should begin to anticipate his arrival, building tension in the scene.
53.   As the door swings open and Chez walks into the room, this almost acts as a wipe transition into an establishing wide shot where you can see the same thing as Chez is seeing.
54.   A extreme close-up of the knife in Chez’s pocket shows it is of big importance in this scene.
55.   The dialogue and sound in this scene is a bit too ‘bland’. It is supposed to be a high-drama, highly intense scene leading up to the climax of the film, but lacks the intensity needed to work with the action.
56.   As Chez removes the knife from his pocket, there is a bad match-on-action. This is supposed to make the scene flow more smoothly, but instead it almost does the opposite, interrupting and breaking up the action sequence.
57.   James is out of focus as he enters the room.
58.   James entering the room breaks up the fast-paced action sequence, leaving the audience unsure of who has been stabbed. Blood is seen on the knife, but it remains unclear (until the next shot) whether it was Chez or Ella that has been stabbed.
59.   Good match on action as James drops his can.
60.   Eye-line match from James’ perspective to focus attention on Ella’s stab wound.
61.   The use of fake blood highlights the severity of the injury
62.   Continuity error – Chez goes from laying on the floor, to standing by the side of Ella without any noticeable scene of getting up.
63.   Desaturated colouring of the final few shots gives the scene a solemn, sad feel, making the audience aware that the feeling in the scene has quickly gone from ‘anger’ to ‘sadness’.
64.   The fading of colour relates to the fading of life.
65.   EPOV The reverberation on the vocals sounds like it is in a dream sequence, or Ella is losing focus
66.   EPOV The shot is blurred intentionally to show Ella is loosing focus
67.   The quote that Ella’s Mum gave to her is repeated at the end, tying the whole film together at the end
68.   Tarantino-style credits are repeated at the end.
69.   Should fade out.





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